A Cloud Over My Head
by Maclean Patrick
There’s a cloud over my head,
The kind that keeps you awake,
Pulls you along a string of dreams,
Annoying, a pest, the beholder of a head-ache,
There’s a frown on my face,
An up-side down smile,
The kind that brings tears to your eyes,
Tears of pain and all things vile,
There’s a hole in my heart,
The kind that comes from a fracture,
Pulling me deeper into the abyss,
A spiral of gray dreams; beyond measure,
There’s a cloud over my head,
The kind that keeps the frown on my face,
A swirl of gray measurable-less dreams and screams,
As I lie watching from this earthly space.
Maclean Patrick 
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I like this. The simplicity of the words gives it a sort of innocence, but some of the phrases are just – graceful. I particularly love “Pulls you along a string of dreams,”, and the line that follows it. I did find a typo, though, I believe.
Think it’s “Theres a hole”? Anyway, regardless I really enjoyed this from start to finish.
Thanks for the compliment. I’ve made a small edit to that little mistake. Thanks again.
No problem. I hope I wasn’t overstepping my bounds… do you write a lot of poetry, if I may ask?
I do actually. I’ve been writing poetry before I actually started writing short stories and novels. It was a way for me to play with words. It’s just that lately, the bug kind of came back to me and I pick up where I left off.
I’ve been reading your work off and on… Have to say i’m glad I’ve gotten the chance to. Poetry is one of my favorite forms fo writing, I think. Thanks for the chance to read some of yours 😛 (And the conversation!)